University life in China
热2已有 224 次阅读 2009-10-03 19:14There are many ways to become success, that is to say, every road leads to Rome, but many others, especially the poor, stick to one way: Admitted to college through hard studying, and I am one of those people because I don’t know what else I can do if I don't attend university. I am not Edison who has a gift for science and so many thoughts always suddenly occurred to him. I figured that many university students have experienced the same course that I have: busy oneselves in the study and ignore what is going on beyond one's immediate surroundings in the high school. We strive for the same goal even though we don’t know each other at all. Once admitted to university, without so many restricts students are easy to be addicted to games and neglect their studies at last.And I figure out it is necessary to tell you something about our High School Education. Maybe it will play a role in your understanding Chinese university life.In my opinion, and according to what I have experienced, our High School Education gets close to craziness. To achieve high marks in the college entrance examination is all students’ and teachers’ same goal and also solitary goal.So it can boldly describe the students who have just experienced the college entrance examination as birds suddenly getting free.








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我建议: cut this into several sentences
我建议: There are many ways to become successful. That is, many roads lead to Rome. But many people, especially the poor, use only method to achieve success. That method is to be admitted to college by hard studying in high school. I am one of those people because I don’t know what else I should do if I don't attend university.
你说了: I am not Edison who has a gift for science and so many thoughts always suddenly occurred to him.
我建议: I am not Edison who had a gift for science. Many thoughts often suddenly popped into his head.
Comment: I use the past tense in the first sentence because I don’t think Edison still has a gift now that he is dead. Currently, I would say he had it, but does not anymore.
你说了: I figured that many university students have experienced the same course that I have: busy oneselves in the study and ignore what is going on beyond one's immediate surroundings in the high school.
我建议: I figured that many university students have experienced the same thing I have. We busy oneselves with studying and ignore what is going on beyond one's immediate surroundings in the high school.
你说了: Once admitted to university, without so many restricts students are easy to be addicted to games and neglect their studies at last.And
我建议: Once they have been admitted to a university, without restrictions from their parents at home, these students are easily addicted to games and neglect their studies at last. And
Comment: space after period (and other minor changes). In the last few sentences, I have tried to shorten your sentences to make them clearer.
你说了: High School Education.
我建议: high school education.
Comment: not capitalized because it is not a specific high school.
你说了: Maybe it will play a role in your understanding Chinese university life.In my opinion, and according to what I have experienced, our High School Education gets close to craziness.
我建议: Like American high schools?
Maybe it will help you understand Chinese university life. In my opinion, based what I have experienced, our high school educational system gets close to craziness.
你说了: To achieve high marks in the college entrance examination is all students’ and teachers’ same goal and also solitary goal.So it can boldly describe the students who have just experienced the college entrance examination as birds suddenly getting free.
我建议: All students and teachers have the same goal: to achieve high marks on the college entrance examination. One can compare students who have just finished the college entrance examination to birds suddenly set free.
stick to one way: Admitted to college through hard studying.
the same course that I have: busy oneselves in the study and ignore what is going on beyond one's immediate surroundings in the high school.